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Dean of Personnel![]() ![]() Registered Member #6 Joined: 504.14.06Rank: Admiral or Equivalent (09) Posts: 1146 | FRIEND In a year, it does not seem so long ago, When gray did not lay so comfortably upon my head. My Voice came to me and said: "Follow me, young fellow and I will show you a treasure, That no wealthy man can buy And it will be yours forever, If you but nurture and protect it I will give it to you if you will try. Will you young fellow? And I answered with all the strength I could muster, Yes. Then little one, glance across the room And claim your prize, the best that I can send Today young fellow, I give you a friend. At that I searched the room for the pledged gem And caught the view of a countenance so bright That I knew in that moment He was the promised friend. His grin was large enough to swallow the world, His eyes invited all to come His heart beckoned to all to become a part of him. I walked to him and in the span of a handshake Our course was set We started down life's dim, uncharted trails together As we journeyed, Our lives wove tightly knit But this was not a solitary journey For what we had was too precious to hoard We had to invite many on the road with us Fathers, mothers, sisters, brothers Interlaced themselves into the weave And others, friends and chums Added into the mix The tapestry that was our life Shown beautiful Then, dear wives, precious children And the Tapestry was beyond price It was truly the treasure that I was promised That day so long ago. Is it not beautiful, I boasted to My Voice I have kept my word and nurtured and strove And now the treasure is all you promised it to be. My Voice answered in disturbing words: Almost, little one, it is almost ready, But not yet. Then one horrible evening The news ran my blood cold, He's gone, they said, He's gone In vain, I searched for our beloved tapestry In its place lay a gaping cavity. Numb, I wept for my loss And tried to satisfy myself with Belief that somehow this was right But I could not find the answer in my heart Finally, I cried out to My Voice: Why? Never before have you taken a gift back from me And you could have even my life in place of my dear treasure What have I done to merit this punishment? Then My Still Small Voice answered: Little one, have we all strove so long together And you still cannot see Your treasure is not lost, I have brought it home for safekeeping Do not worry Your fair haired companion will guard it well. His work is done, but yours not yet. Your journey's end is not too far off And soon you will have your treasure again. But young fellow Did you not see My Thread woven into the fabric Of your treasure? It was the very first And extends the whole length of the work You traveled well and long And were called by many names Husband, son, father, brother But long ago in a battle won at a dear price, You two won the right to the title And have borne it proudly now this long campaign. So little one, My Voice consoled Bear it just a little longer and soon you two will stand together as before And again I will call you My Friends. | ||
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Co-Founder of the New Worlds Project![]() ![]() Registered Member #1 Joined: 504.29.05Rank: Admiral or Equivalent (09) Posts: 2561 | I love this poem! It's such a nice - complicated & yet not complicated use of metaphors! I can really imagine being thrown back in time to live the tale! Niche one, dear Monty! And welcome to the Writer's Sanctum! | ||
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Galactic Demi Goddess![]() Registered Member #8 Joined: 504.14.06Rank: Admiral or Equivalent (09) Posts: 1807 | I read it twice because I really wanted it to wash over me and each time I read it I like it more. | ||
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Co-Founder of the New Worlds Project![]() ![]() Registered Member #1 Joined: 504.29.05Rank: Admiral or Equivalent (09) Posts: 2561 | I agree with you Avrielle, it's one of those poems you really have to read from top to bottom and digest before you can really appreciate it! | ||
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It's such a nice - complicated & yet not complicated use of metaphors! I can really imagine being thrown back in time to live the tale! 


